Luwano's art Reviews on Newgrounds

['Positive' Space]

Wonderful

It is a beautiful drawing, I love the colors and I like the design of the space suit.

The only problem to me is, that the character doesn't really stand out from the background. Especially in the small view. If you squint at the pic (or you can try to blur it with an art program) she kinda gets lost in the background and the only thing that really stands out is the visor of her helmet.

I think that is due to the fact that you applied a proper highlight to the helmet. If you added shades and highlights to the rest of the body too it would really "pop out".

I think you did an awesome job on the background. At first sight, I thought you used water colors.

I also like the contrast of the flowing dynamic nebulas versus her rigid pose.

The hand looks like it could be wrong anatomically, but then again it could be the armor that is built that way.

I am not a fan of the white at the bottom, because it doesn't actually look like ground.

The title was a good choice to go along with the pic and a good play on words for this case.

Overall a great piece with wonderful colors and a nice idea, of course.

newbienalwayswillbe responds:

Thank you for putting a lot of thought into your critiquing. When I first drew the spacesuit girl it was kind of a doodle that got way out of hand when I started the background. Haha. I can't say I really disagree with anything you said either so, spot on, yeah?

[Beer Flooder]

Refreshingly fizzy

I love the dynamic that is going on here and the color palette is simply great.

What I dislike is that there are a bit too much undefined and blurry parts.

I can figure that there is some person/humanoid dancing and reaching out holding that beer bubble, but it's kinda hard to make out everything. I think you did well on the different bubbles and you did very well considering the short time you had.

All blurriness aside, looking at the pic is fun. You said it's a monster that can flood enemies with beer, but it really seems like dancing. Maybe a ceremonial dance to summon its awesome beer powers? ^^

You did a good job on the foreshortening and I like how you incorporated the icon.

Overall a great pic with a lot of energy, that could have used a bit more definition here and there. Well done!

[BeerFly]

Great concept

It's really a cool idea and as for the lineart it is pretty well executed. It would be even better if you added some shading or optimally even color.

Nevertheless, it's a good piece of art with an interesting composition.

I like how you managed to give the bottle a glassy look just using some thin pencil strokes especially on the neck, it comes across very well.

It would have been a much stronger piece if the background was not just plain white. I think some indicated stars or distant clouds would have done the trick.

The lines should have been a bit more cleaned up. There is for example a guideline from the bottle's top to the bottom and one crossing from the left wing to the right wing still rather prominent.

I like how you did the flames, especially the dented part where they emerge.

Overall it's a great idea with great lineart, but I would love to see this brushed up and completely finished someday. Or, since you probably want to keep this one the way it is, a new colored and shaded drawing based on the same concept.

[Drunkard's Delirium]

Difficult but good

It's the little details like the heart tattoo, the bubbles etc. that add up to something I really like. I think you did a good job with the lineart and it's a really interesting piece. I must admit, that I am not absolutely sure what I am looking at.

I agree with the others, that the colored items in the background are distracting, but I think it's ok for the green bottle and the reddened cheeks and nose.

I don't know why there is a cigarette hovering on his left, but I see it caused a fire. So that's probably part of the story of the drunkyard, which I don't really understand unfortunately.

All in all a good piece on the art side, but a difficult pic on the interpretational side. Or maybe I am just trying to overinterpret, who knows?

Well done!

[Beerfish]

Out of beer

I like how you did the bubbles and the area where the fish hits the "beer surface" is really convincingly done. The fish itself is well done and I like the color you chose for it as well as the glossy, wet looking highlighting.

You could added a bit more "watery look" to the surface itself though. Except for the bubbles in the lower half there is just a barely recognizable color variation going on to suggest that it's actually a liquid. I think you should have made that a bit more visible. It's even less visible in the top part so it almost looks completely like one kind of yellow in the background, but at least there is something happening.

So art-wise I think it is a clear ten, but you could have done more with the composition. I like the elongated format however and of course how you incorporated the thumbnail.

[Skullface Makeup]

Great teeth

The teeth are very well done. The area around the eyes and nose is good too, but the mouth is the really impressing part.

Would be interesting to see this with a complete costume. I am aware that you are just testing the make-up, but your hair for example looks to "nice" or "benign" in combination with that skull.

Either way, nice work on that.

Sabtastic responds:

The costume was lazily done, but it's the same zombie outfit that I wore last year, only this time my face looks different. Origionally, I wanted to go with something like a 'day of the dead' / sugar skull dress, with roses in my hair, but I kind of dropped the ball on that one. Didn't have roses -or- a dress. lol

[Achenaes]

Fanciful

I really like your designs for those spirits here as well the ideas behind them, it's pretty creative.

You managed to make them look distinguishable while still looking like related or "similar" beings somehow.

Your color choices are really great. They fit the characteristics you gave each of them well.

It strikes me that the Samhach seems to be the only one without a "three-dimensional" shading. I know that spirits can be flat though, so you could have done it on purpose, but I just thought I should mention it anyway.

As for the writing, I noticed that most paragraphs start with the spirits' names which is absolutely fine, it's just that I feel like Lindach's description should start with its name too, instead of "they". I know it's such a minor issue but I think it would help the reading flow.

"Hospital" is written twice in the habitat section of the Shilach.

The adult and child silhouette to compare sizes is a nice addition generally, but I feel like it's out of place where it is now. It should either have its own little box or the comparison of each spirit with those two silhouettes should each be in the respective panels.

Overall it's an enchanting piece of art that is very well executed.

I hope you don't mind that most of my "critique" is basically just some kind of nitpicking. But there isn't really much to critique apart from that.

Great job!

5/5 & 10/10

Luxembourg responds:

No, the nitpicking is fine! They're all great points and things I noticed, too after submitting this. The Samhach is less three-dimensional because I wanted it to look a little more ethereal and ghostly. Also, after blending the colors like that, I honestly wasn't so sure of how to apply shading to it. The second "hospital" should have said "concert halls". I wasn't really sure where else to put the size comparisons.
Thanks for the review. Sorry about all the little mistakes. I'm glad you like it, though!