Luwano's art Reviews on Newgrounds

['Positive' Space]

Wonderful

It is a beautiful drawing, I love the colors and I like the design of the space suit.

The only problem to me is, that the character doesn't really stand out from the background. Especially in the small view. If you squint at the pic (or you can try to blur it with an art program) she kinda gets lost in the background and the only thing that really stands out is the visor of her helmet.

I think that is due to the fact that you applied a proper highlight to the helmet. If you added shades and highlights to the rest of the body too it would really "pop out".

I think you did an awesome job on the background. At first sight, I thought you used water colors.

I also like the contrast of the flowing dynamic nebulas versus her rigid pose.

The hand looks like it could be wrong anatomically, but then again it could be the armor that is built that way.

I am not a fan of the white at the bottom, because it doesn't actually look like ground.

The title was a good choice to go along with the pic and a good play on words for this case.

Overall a great piece with wonderful colors and a nice idea, of course.

newbienalwayswillbe responds:

Thank you for putting a lot of thought into your critiquing. When I first drew the spacesuit girl it was kind of a doodle that got way out of hand when I started the background. Haha. I can't say I really disagree with anything you said either so, spot on, yeah?

[Skullface Makeup]

Great teeth

The teeth are very well done. The area around the eyes and nose is good too, but the mouth is the really impressing part.

Would be interesting to see this with a complete costume. I am aware that you are just testing the make-up, but your hair for example looks to "nice" or "benign" in combination with that skull.

Either way, nice work on that.

Sabtastic responds:

The costume was lazily done, but it's the same zombie outfit that I wore last year, only this time my face looks different. Origionally, I wanted to go with something like a 'day of the dead' / sugar skull dress, with roses in my hair, but I kind of dropped the ball on that one. Didn't have roses -or- a dress. lol

[Achenaes]

Fanciful

I really like your designs for those spirits here as well the ideas behind them, it's pretty creative.

You managed to make them look distinguishable while still looking like related or "similar" beings somehow.

Your color choices are really great. They fit the characteristics you gave each of them well.

It strikes me that the Samhach seems to be the only one without a "three-dimensional" shading. I know that spirits can be flat though, so you could have done it on purpose, but I just thought I should mention it anyway.

As for the writing, I noticed that most paragraphs start with the spirits' names which is absolutely fine, it's just that I feel like Lindach's description should start with its name too, instead of "they". I know it's such a minor issue but I think it would help the reading flow.

"Hospital" is written twice in the habitat section of the Shilach.

The adult and child silhouette to compare sizes is a nice addition generally, but I feel like it's out of place where it is now. It should either have its own little box or the comparison of each spirit with those two silhouettes should each be in the respective panels.

Overall it's an enchanting piece of art that is very well executed.

I hope you don't mind that most of my "critique" is basically just some kind of nitpicking. But there isn't really much to critique apart from that.

Great job!

5/5 & 10/10

Luxembourg responds:

No, the nitpicking is fine! They're all great points and things I noticed, too after submitting this. The Samhach is less three-dimensional because I wanted it to look a little more ethereal and ghostly. Also, after blending the colors like that, I honestly wasn't so sure of how to apply shading to it. The second "hospital" should have said "concert halls". I wasn't really sure where else to put the size comparisons.
Thanks for the review. Sorry about all the little mistakes. I'm glad you like it, though!

[Absorb]

Wow!

This is great, I really like it. I kinda expect it to start moving very slowly any moment.

I would lie, if I said I would not wish for some more definition on the branches, especially on the lower part, but it is still very captivating. Some more definition would just help to retain that feeling in the full view too.

Reminds me of gaia from greek mythology in a very mystic and enchanting interpration.

I like the colours and the transition from light to dark, but the facial expression is really the most impressive part.

Great job!

Rhunyc responds:

Hey thanks! I appreciate that :3

[Soreon the Ninja]

Beware of the Mascara Ninja!

Nice job on this one. I like how you drew him in some kind of semi-realistic way. Almost like you "borrowed" some cartoony features and even anime style hair.

I think the serious facial expression looks good on him.

The texture on the ninja suit was a nice choice, but I don't like how it is just plain and does not change on the arms or generally does not follow the ups and downs of the body. Though I know this would be a pain to do it all correct, but I still thought I should mention it.

The anatomy on the body is very well done and I take it, the anatomy on the head is a bit more anime-ish on purpose, since it goes rather well with the hairdo.

And finally I also like the background and how you still made the actual char stand out from it even though it's grey too.

Good job!

Kashi responds:

You should leave reviews more often :3
The texture, I had the same thoughts, but didn't really know how to go about it, then the "well, its just bad fanart anyway" really didn't help in the motivation department either :/
Thaaaaaaaaaaanks :3

[Loge]

Well done

You did a great job bringing the main idea across. The contrast is ever-present, may it by light and dark, hard and soft or dynamic and calm.

The only real problem is, that in the small view it looks as if both upper legs are visible but it is in fact the upper arm of the robot that sticks out between her feet. People must view this in full size to see what is going on there.

Great job!

P.S.: Agnry Faic.... nice ^^

Flowers10 responds:

Very well spotted!

[Monkey King]

Late review is late

Nice pic you got there. Your lineart is awesome and I love the colour scheme.

The different colour of the dragon balls and our flood icon draws all my attention on them however.

At least you turned the nipples red to get them some more exposure too. :P

You should have made the actual char pop out a little more.

Other than that it's great.

Also puffy nipples are puffy. ^^

ZaneZansorrow responds:

indeed they are :3

[RROOOOAAAAAAAARR!!]

Love it

This is a great entry. Besides the fact that the game was pretty cool and this one brings back these memories, it is also very well drawn.

First off I like your colouring and shading. Not only the technique but also the colour choice.

Secondly it's impressive how clean and smooth everything looks. Especially considering that it is hand drawn with several different tools. I would have smudged everything all over the pic I guess. :P

Finally I like how you coped with all the different light sources. I may not be an expert, but it seems you've managed them all well.

Overall a great piece!

5/5 & 10/10

Merol responds:

Thank you a lot for your review!
Yes, that game is amazing!
There are some flaws with the lights, specially the ones coming from the fire.

By the way, whenever i'm making a drawing I always put another piece of paper over it so i don't have to place my hand over the drawing and smudge everything!

THANKS AGAIN!!
(sorry for taking so long to respond).